Just to Clarify:

The Chapter I posted yesterday is not a sequel, nor should it be perceived as such.  It is a new draft of a book that I have already written once but was not happy with when I was finished.  I will be posting between 2 and 3 chapters a week here until I finish the new draft, which means if you were going to read along about 6 months if it is as long as I think it will be. 

Feel free to critique whatever you like, I’ll ignore most of it anyway, but I’m always curious what other people think.  And if nothing else, trust that there is a point, I already know how the thing ends, just have to get there.